ehsan gill

on the advice of Make Every Work Count- Gary Provost i have gone back and revised some earlier writing. clarify, tighten and remove some of the wordyness that i suffer from. 

--ORIGINAL--

There is something interesting about wounds that are cauterized at the point of faith. A chance confluence of events that hardens around a told and retold story about when god answered the call of the faithful. When your prayers were met with action. Ignoring the previous times that they were left unanswered. So I wonder where I might keep such belief. Is it renewed or dispelled by the problems of the previous months. I'm not sure, however I remain less resentful, I see the desperation in the mouths of others. The place faith has in helping people hold on. And I'v become less disdainful of this kind of need. In an indiscriminate life we do what we can to hold on. Faith is desperation, as the earth spins beneath us, rocketing at unfathomable speeds away from under our feet

---REVISION---

There is something about wounds that are cauterized at the point of faith. A chance series of events that harden around a told and retold story about when god answered the call. When your prayers were met with action. Ignoring the many times when they unanswered. So I wonder where I might store such faith. Is it revived or dispelled by my recent problems. I'm not sure. However, I know that I’m less resentful when I see such desperation in others. I have become less disdainful of such need. In an indiscriminate life we do what we can to hold on ourselves. Faith is desperation, as the earth spins beneath us, pulling the ground out from under our feet.

is it any better?